Varentao is trying to explain to Shiznit that while Tampons are indeed expensive, a baseball bat used to stuff wads of toilet paper accomplish the job just as well and are a lot cheaper. (I forgot, what are Tampons supposed to do again?)

Anyway, on to your peice. To be perfectly honest, the very first part was a total turn off. Generally, dropping a big dose of talent right off the bat sounds like a good idea, and if I could I'd probably of done it too, but I can see how it can really make a person not want to read it. It's just too much too quick sort of thing. Cause seriously, you got mad vocab, but then you simplified it later on in the second half. Maybe if somehow that was switched around it could be a more gradual thing?

I don't know. I'm a dumbass.

~Shalom~

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Originally posted by Bruklor Nec is just dumb

I'm taking that as a compliment.