aight the flow was so/so..... need to fix your syllabul count per line
the reason it was called whack is cause you didnt say anything worth taking a second look, no kinda word play... word choice was bad.. ie. you used simple 1-2 syllabul words
i hi by cry die scry....etc

the internals were there, but once again simple...
you have skill this site is the peak of elevation...
u might start on some other site... here your bench warming... feel me?

good drop kid, and this is constructive critisim...cool?