This was dopeness, it had real nice flo, vocab and content
I even laughed out loud at a couple parts

Being bored is a sin to me . . These "faults" seem deplored by contingencies
I thought it was a cologne; but, hell I think Allure is the industry
Birds of prey learn to sway, and we've left the vultures infatuated
Let us rejoice with a Western hymn: "Cheers! Our culture is saturated!"
^nice wordplay and use of humour

each part was dope as an individual, but I think that it could of tied together a little better

The tumor's the source - meanwhile, our own consumers are coarse
Why laugh at witless jokes when we know that the humour is forced?
^you seemed to get a little off topic here

but I liked the whole hip-hop theme that you kept relating back to
I was definetly a good read but I thought it could of been a little more unified
very nice piece though, you obviously know how to write, lol
I'd give it an 8/10
Props, Keep dropp'n
Hit up my collab with Hazy.B (Stalker's Intuition) if you get a chance, peace