thank you raves for applying the rules of this forum to
yourself for everyone else and I wasnt doing this to be
a prick...now to your poem..which I did like....

this would sound nice over a beat or without a beat
as an open mic piece in front of people..coffeehouse..
all that ish..the vocabulary was average and the delivery
was good...the way you broke it up had made it more
reader friendly to those who actually do read..well done

please reply if you have the time..you being busys understood

la paz