well first i have to say props for actually trying to be critical realist

next i have to say that syllable count is not a factor, you won't be able to read it that same way i will flow it.... sorry you can't hear me speed up for a mad flow flex...

maybe i will try a few longer rhymes but don't hate on

"fanatic, asthmatic" "internal, infernal, eternal"

by the way a rhyme can bridge more than one word for example:

"That's it im spent" to "Magnificent"

ya feel?

{Peace}

P.S.
they call whack because it's the only thing worth talking about on this site...

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