O... K... well i have to agree this was a very original concept...

Props and yea i give it like 9/10 in that categorie....

But, some of your rhymes were just plain off...sorry...
"On the first day I spoke, the world appeared,
Remarkable, only water, no land as far the eyes could reach."

"Prepare for the fourth, as I pop the sun with my fork
And eat the moon's cheese with my teeth and my own jaws"

In addition my feeling is that emcees shouldnt use topical words to stretch a line...

"On the fifth, I'll tip toxins deep within the water mist
And submit chemicals to the birds, death torture sick


On day six i almost created everything living and breathing,
Humans, but also feelings , hate, love, so retrieving."

"death torture sick"?? does this mean something grammatically or are you just trying to put these 3 words together for effect?

"hate, love, so retrieving." please break this down cuz it literally means......umm...ermmm....uh...nothing.

this could have been much better... i give it a 5/10 for style...sorry...

{Peace}

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