Thread: Da Renegade
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Old 10-04-03, 05:45 PM   #6
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The lines themselves were tight....

keep up that... i got a freestyle feel from this though...

what i mean is some lines rhymed well internally but had no real function otherwise.... ex. "At warp speeds across fields, da renegade 'cross beams'"

this line did not rhyme with the previous or following lines...

ya feel?

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