I think of the same line as the others it was decent and I
think that the main thing to work on is getting some metaphors
or just spicing it up a little bit. When you describe how you feel
you want to make everyone else feel what you are feeling.


"but you are the meanest, by far"

That was the one line I really believe you could have come up
with something better just by reading the rest of it.

"someone who once broke your heart
true or false:"


My favorite, because it has a little play on words there and it brought the piece over well. keep writing

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