I'LL BRACK IT DOWN!!!!
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When I flow, an audible verbal spike, it's through a mike,
It's not slow, maybe not what you like, so take a hike,
I real man pays his battle fees, and in a single breath could bring a room to it's knees,
So text emcees please, why don't you learn to rhyme without your keys,
Ill make you wheeze, cuz your not fit for for this spit fanatic,
Your lungs seize, you'll think this is it, my attacks asthmatic,
I'm really not sure, if I should infer, with lines internal,
What might occur, when you see but a blur, Im goin infernal,
My skills are eternal, try keepin abreast, with this man from the west,
Yo im checkin my journal, when put to the test, how many whack did i best?
^^ THIS was a strong start good vocab good flow
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So from coast to coast, the fingers must be burnin of the fools that i roast,
especially this forums host, who must think he's the toast for having the most posts,
K I've had my fun, and by the way ive never heard the term wordplay,
It's called a pun, and if may can i step to the mike and call you all gay,
^^^Lacked the intensity you started with and vocab dropped
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That's it im spent, id be shocked to see that one of you wrote me,
Magnificent, its likely locked theres a much better chance ill see one of you quote me.
^^^Weak finish You just need to write more take a lil more time you have talent you just aren't putting it all together
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you wanted constructive critisism you got it son now peep my shit
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