The best part was the end...i love it when the topic is called whack...(usually is)... haha anyways yea it was alright man...if i had to be critical(don't really feel like it) I would say to keep an eye on how many lines/rhymes you've got...

"respect to the fallen soldierz and those in boot camp...
also those in the ghetto'z lightin' they house with crude lamps...
while grocery shopping with food stamps..."

the third line doesn't really have a place... not that it isn't good but at some point you have to cut....even the good ideas...

{Peace}

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