This is a great piece LadyWun, I love the double line rhyme, really kept the flow going. I may be totally off base here as I sense the intimacy of the piece, but I couldnt help but get a Hansel and Gretel feel out of it. Not to say its like a nursery rhyme, but more about the bond of siblings against 'the World' as it may.. I have a sneaky impression that I get this vibe only because I once wrote a somewhat adult take off on the Hansel and Gretel rhyme, and some of the lines in this are so similar to mine.

Most likely, thats whats influencing my train of thought
I feel like toward the end of the poem you are confronting your own fear of having let someone down.. Gave me the feeling of this being a very personal piece.

All in all LadyWun, a really nice read...great imagery and flow.. Thanks. Kudos~

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