iight

this was a good piece, but it could have been better, could have expanded on it some i thought, but it was still good as is.

i liked the one/ two line thing it made it a nice read, but you should try to up your vocab some

your emotion was felt, coz you left it shine thou, and its also something ppl can relate to easly

i like how you gave us some sort of "flashbacks" like the braiding your hair thing, it built onto it more, but you could have put some more in there about how it was before to build onto the how much you miss those simple things.

~Tera~
DONT HATE

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