its was aight.....a lil basic in most things,

mainly i feel you gotta tighten the structure i mean this won't flow well e.g:

When I flow, an audible verbal spike, it's through a mike,
It's not slow, maybe not what you like, so take a hike,
I real man pays his battle fees, and in a single breath could bring a room to it's knees,
So text emcees please, why don't you learn to rhyme without your keys,


or aswell if you made it more like this:

When I flow, an audible verbal spike.... it's through a mike,
It's not slow, maybe not what you like so.... take a hike,
real man pays his battle fees,single breath could bring rooms to knees,
text emcees please, why don't you rhyme without your keys,

even then its not as good as it could be....but its much better in my opinion and ... reflect a pause so even tho the lines are much different in size (couplets) you are showin its longer then the text...

just keep droppin...main thing...take the CONSTRUCTIVE CRITISCIM only tho....thats only way to elevate