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Old 10-06-03, 02:25 PM   #2
Dirty Sally
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That is a good battle verse. You use clever wordplay and you got plenty punches. The structure is solid and the flow is real sick. All that is lacking are metaphors and multies. Other than that it was a good solid piece. My favorite line- Funny once confronted for battle they hibernate like they sick in bed with the flu... lol Stay active.
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