break down

FLow: its ok structure was ok, lacked complexity it wasnt basic tho, altho it was a good read, it flowed with meaning, some peices flow but the meaning is scrambled, this was clear gets the reader and keeps them till the end,

Vocab/WOrdplay: it was basic but it fit the piece, it was more of n expresive drop with raw emotion than a extensive vocab and deep thought drop

Topic: its a lil played, but the emotion you had in ti was what held it togethercould have had more raw emotion but o well good the way it is.

Critisim: RAW EMOTION basically all it needs, more complexity in the structure and stronger lines, other wise good

overall

8/10