"flow- your flow was good, you stuck to a good rhyme scheme,
and it didnt fall off... you was consistent in the way you rhymed.

Throw in some multies... they always lead to astonishment, and
can often be the winning factor in battles, open mics, ect...

Vocab- was pretty basic except for a few words... if you throw in
some good vocab... it shocks the fuck out the reader, and plus it
shows that you are intelligent.

Wordplay- didnt see much of that either... dont really need it in a
drop like this... you did good in this area.

Content- your topic was great, overall, it was a rare topic and I
enjoyed reading this... plus your ability to stay on topic is outstanding... I'm givin you mad props on that dawgy... your ability to stay on topic is what made this piece a great drop...
keep droppin fam... I hope this feedback helps...
A.T."

^^^ Damn, I cant hate that. I agree, 1

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" So for the 2nd time [The Pharisses] summoned the man who had been blind and said
"Speak the truth before God. We know this man is a sinner."
"Wether he is a sinner I do not know."
:The man replied:
"All I know is this...Once I was blind and now I can see"
John 1x 24-26