Hey Hazy..
This was an amazing piece..Kind of reminded me of my old "She's Sorry" one in Legend's, but it had a flair all its own and the twist at the end was stunning and heart wrenching. Great imagery and descriptiveness...not too much but just enough to really enthrall the readers..

"so she knocks on his door....gets down on her knees n sobs...she screams n pleads....hoping the tears will let him kno...he slams the door in her face she's not his problem any more......"

Reading that was like a kick in the stomach for me..Being a female, I can only imagine what that girl must have been going thru, and being shut out like that at the time she needed it most...horribly sad..

And also this part:
>she's in trouble for real indeed....
heads to the clinic 2 months later...gets some static walking through the door.....labeled crack house whore....the doctor says gurl sorry but its to late to evacuate....your pregnancy has to follow through.....sorry to complicate..

Whssseewww..one of my worst fears right there..This girl just had so much happen to her all at once...The "crack house whore" line really was kinda of blunt but true! I know if i was in her situation, you gotta do what you gotta do, but walking into that clinic, so young, with so many people judging you..might be just as hard as getting the abortion itself......very powerful.

I liked how you gave that kind of sad foretelling of what the child would live like in the future...Having her father but never really understanding what happened and how he in some ways was responsible for the loss of her mother...

And also..I was so glad you didn't just end this piece on her killing herself. The fact that you added that extra slap in the face, the whole "two minutes, too late" thing with the baby's daddy coming to try and help her...really extremely tragic..really gave an extra umph to the piece..made it very compelling, and unline anything i've read before..
This was a fantastic piece, Hazy..Youre great when it comes to story telling.
Keep up the good work..
Pz gyrl.