yuo kno modestly im realyl beggingin to like you

you give decent replies
your a decent poet
and your personality isnt like
IM GONNA TAKE THIS ISH OVA YA HEARD!)

your a nice lil guy id like to say and i appreciate you taking your time and spending it with us in the poetry room

persoanl thanks from hazy

now on to your poem no rythm no flow

those to elements arnt nceesarily neede din poetry
and if they where id say ryhthm is needed over flow


teh evil maintanied line doesnt really fit with teh peice

i felt this was an original peice but i also feel you wernt ready to post it up perhps rushed it? this peice had potential to be better
its up to you if you want to take it there

hazy