Thread: Da Renegade
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Old 10-07-03, 12:49 PM   #16
A.T.
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I liked the opening line... very clever and nice use of multies...
"Going 'gainst me feels like the year's 1965|
Ninety niggas die when nine to sixty five shells hit you by surprise|"
^ very nice...
one the rest you kinda lagged the flow a lil... keep that rhyme
scheme and this peice would have been great...
I like your multies, and your metties were decent...
overall this was a good drop... just focus on a rhyme scheme...
A.T.
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