Alright, I have just read both pieces and heres my thoughts.....


Sonn......

The depth of your poem was what really drew me to your piece....no fantasy BS but complete realism in itself.... i really had an easy time understanding the piece along with following the flow..heres a line that got me nicely.....

"Violence leads to weapons and weapons lead to silence
God created us equally and man has taken it for granted
Then times got rough and people cried to god..they chanted
People never see the glory of what they have until its taken"

Total truth sadly...things are recognized and changed through consequeces which leads to misfortune and hopefully eventually some sort of happiness.... Great piece Sonn

Ill.....

Your piece to me was less indepth but still held a good truth/meaning.....Lives can be changed drastically just with one small sequence.....which can turn to drastic measures....sadly some relations aren't sought on the same view point....Its a guessing game...and it sucks....nice work


vote: Sonn-In Time

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