Darneck was...varentao was, is and will be...thanks for appreciating the difference, hazy...(just in case, i used to be darneck..to stop any possible confusion..)...


This was quite beautiful. The imagery and emotions were pure, and kind of innocent. Maybe that innocence comes with it being your first piece. Though i must say, for a first piece it was very good. It shows the basis of good writing talent.

The depths of which the piece went to was a joy to read. Using metaphors to good personal effect. The rawness of it bringing it home one way or the other. The reader doesn't have to dig. You could read this just as it is. And still appreciate it to an extent. But it also enables one to dig. And though the 'direction' of it could sometimes be confusing and lost (to which i relate). It still is there to dig into...

This first piece, as said above, shows the basis of a very good writer. And the further proof is in what you have done since this piece.

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