okay.

white- your verse was pretty deep...it seemed like you were completely off topic in the middle, and then I re-read the first lines and the last few lines, and was like "dag yo, it all be makin sense, nucca!". Yeah, I think in a gankstuh voice. You had a nice flow, but your rhymes were mostly one word with one syllable, and there wasn't much vocab sticking out. You should try to add all the elements of a dope rhyme to your storytelling talent...your verses would be really dope.

2hot2handle- You need to elevate a lot. Your verse was really played out. It had emotion, but it didn't seem like you tried very hard. Everything you talked about just had to do with living a shitty life , which would have been nice if you had incorporated wordplay and stuff, but you just rambled on. Also, try to tighten up your flow, shit was all over the place. A lot of your words didn't rhyme either.

vote- WhiteLightning

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