Hi My Name Is- well, this wasn't a great verse. Your take wasn't original, because the topic obviously relates to prison, so it woulda been cool if you flipped it. You had very little wordplay and flow, and your multies were nearly non-existant. Your really need to elevate. The best part was the storytelling aspect of the whole thing, it was really nice, because you told it from the man's perspective, which was cool. Work on everything else though.

Ray Zor- This would have been dope as fuck if it was longer. You had really good wordplay, and the vocab was nice. You just really need to try to write a full verse next time. 8 lines can't compete against 20, you dig?

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