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Old 10-07-03, 10:33 PM   #11
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^ I'll discount it if you like, because it was a whack vote. It's up to you though.

LaRyan- First off, I gotta say, you have no flow. It's sad, really. You gotta try to add a flow to your words man, or it makes it more difficult for the reader. Your wordplay is off the hook, and you have a really good message in this. The melodramatics were incorporated in your exaggeration of everything and when you referred to the various world issues. Very nicely done.

T Square- Nice verse. You had the message of Shabaz, with a better flow, but you lost the abstract feel of his. Even if it wasn't abstract. = / I have to quote you here
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Even my perspective on a topic that I cannot even spell/

Comic gold.
I really like the entire thing, it had me hooked start to finish. Well done.

vote-T Square
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