the message was not clear to me, the context was very nice
though, what makes this poem so hard for me to interpret
i suppose is the fact that the metaphors are so thick, but
that is always something good to play with. what i did get from
the poem seems that in the begining you were speaking of
your own self and your senses, then it seemed you were making
love, and then you spoke of your mother ( which to me i dont think both should ever be in the same poem.. lol) and then a birth
which seems to have been taking place throughout the poem, and
then you were speaking of your daughter, and then the emotion
seemed to have changed to unhappy, like you wont be able to
continue those wonderful feelings... maybe im wrong but either
way.. it was nice.. Keep writing

one thing.. try to put in comma's so that the reader can
understand how it is that you are reading it.

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