i would agree they were very scattered, the message was clear
and to the point but there was a lot of nonsense that could be
left out in the future. To make a poem great you need to let
everyone feel what you feel or what you are thinking about
without making them bored or not wanting to finish reading. Not
saying that it made me all of that. Think of a poem as a story to
let people know what is going on with your life in a short way.
This poem has to be precise, effective, and very strong it has to
have its own personality, just like your own writing should fit your
own personality. The way you write hints at the way you think,
which in this case it was very simple but filled with confusion.
obviously that is the way you feel about it, mixed up about it.
About why most likely, just try to sort them out after you write it
out and it will help a lot. Overall decent read. Keep writing.

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