Yo that verse was wack but it was literally a 2 min keystyle.
i usually battle at ionic.instanceart.org/forum - lyricist lounge
(sorry if u can't put addresses but edit that out rather then my post plz man)peep this verse i posted last night vs Catastrophe and give me some feedback.

Verse
Man....I know this kid aint no herb but he's still gonna bleed/
Rip this fool outta the floor... fuck a herb, this kids a weed/
Put lyrical in front of ya name and you've a pretty good description/
If you ever pen a rhymebook, it'll be wack....that's Non Fiction/
One look at my rhymes got you rubbing ya eyes in disbelief/
Refreshing ya page won't make it any less tight chief/
I'mma torch-a you son, burning ya skin to first degree/
But i guess you're used to the sensation since contracting V.D/
Ya crew ain't menaces to society, just boyz in the hood, baby boy/
I'm comin straight for ya jugular like you was Siegfried and Roy/
Swift Xecutionas....your group of fools will never last/
Just like ya boy Divinci, it seems you're livin in the past/
Punk....I'll properly, possibly, punish ya verse philisophically/
Cos 'you've achieved a degree that precedes all wack emcees' probably/
You aint a real dog....you're just undercover like Tim Roth/
A professional choke artist, while others spit you just cough/
Cats Attackin The Aftermath, Shit...This Rookies Only Postponing His Elevation/
Workin all night on ya rhyme, suffering from sleep deprivation/
And still ya vocab and wordplay are below average, you can't match me/
I'll murder you over n over like Itchy does Scratchy/
Cos ya shits played n more repetitive than reality t.v/
Ya ratings gonna drop without an originality c.v/
This fools a Village People fan, a real homosexual bigot/
Either that or theres some village thats missing its idiot/
You need a fuckin miracle but i'm the saviour from up above/
I make you a black eyed g, n you still ask me where's the love?/
Wack rappers are an endangered species, since the penalties capital punishment/
This herbs the opposite of Pun, seriously lacking lyrical nourishment/

Peace


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