I love the Jazz/hip-hop steez...its tooo smooth...

your spit however....-is not smooth...

you should relax a bit more on the mic...sounded like you'd tense up trying not to mess ya verse up...

a bit more practice on your timing and calm down when getting near the end of ya verse...
its like a bad cresendo...

and ya boy singin.....-is not doin it...

maybe with more help chorus wise..he'll soud fine...but...the cat is borderline tonedeaf from what i hear...

keep bulding...

:sidenote:

you'll love my new track...peep it...