not to bad i didnt like it but i have an aqquired ear for a certain type of hip hop, but improvment is needed and tha skill to utilize that improvment is there, you structure was good, rhyme scheme was aiight, i thought your lines were to stretched out, u should drop tha gangsta style, cause that doesnt help your flow, you should elevate your skill before you put down your persona, uh u need multis multis will help your flow, other than that it wasnt that bad,keep elevatin and keep droppin.~1~