ok, flow was off to me, try working on your structure..make all your lines around the same length so it'll flow better....you could also use some multies to help the flow...vocab was simple and could use some upping...content was ok, maybe could have used some more wordplay or something....it stayed on topic....overall an ok drop...keep dropping...the more you write the better you'll get...

so i think ill stick to alive chicks from now on
and hope to god nobody digs up my front lawn

liked the way you ended it ^

if you get a chance could you peep my latest open mic and give me some feedback...
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=83967