Well i think, u dont change things u write, ..but u could do somthings bout ur structure,...kinda, use, less words that still result in the same,...and up the vocab,..but with a good concept, for me personally, ..the vocab, ...idsnt really inportant,....but it makes it nicer to read....combined wit a good structure, ..its even better, than its allready is,....but for u personally, (Cuz u have nice concepts, and a good vocab most times) i would say work on structure...

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