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Old 10-11-03, 07:43 PM   #9
BiZzUrK
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From: ILL-I-NOIS
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My breakdown
Flo- Tie
Structure - Tie
Imagery - A2Z
Metaphors - Faze
Vocab - A2Z
More interesting read - A2Z

Both came pretty nice, faze had nice flo and sum good metaphors
"Burning bridges as I go, made enemies with people I didnt know,
never mended, I had the needle but didnt have the intent to sew."

but faze's story was overall pretty basic vocab and acton wise he didnt cut where to the action was which would of made it all the more interesting

A2Z had with more gripping imagery that generated more interest with me by staying mostly in the present and he kept the action up

"But Now Adolf Hitler Lays In A Bunker, Surrounded By Angry Men
Each One Armed With Guns, Wishing It Could Be Them"
^clear climax that kept me on the edge of my couch, lol

The use of Hitler's death with the topic was more eye-catching, combined with the flo and vocab allowed for a better read than faze's.

Vote-A2Z (*How's that for an explained vote?)