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Old 10-12-03, 06:23 PM   #2
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From: HELL!!....and yet you think im jokin
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iight

it wasnt all that bad, but i do find that it jumped really fast when you could have made this a longer, more pictured, felt piece. your vocab was pretty good, and the message of the piece was good, and different. i liked the part most about the innocence of babies then because of hate in the world, that it grows on them too. good piece

~Tera~
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