aight man, that was ok, it was kinda short, next time ima suggest make it a little longer, and try and make all ur lines about the same length to help wit the flow, u had ok vocab and wordplay, next time try and fit in a few more multis though, ur content and topic were pretty damn played in my opinion, so next time pick a more decent topic to write about.....keep droppin dude, u have ability......

peace.......