it was good for your first poem, as for the structure it was good
you cant really base structure on certain things because everyone
has their own style. but i agree that you truely messed on the
female thing. the content wasnt that bad, but on a lot of parts
sentences just dont fit together, you should just try to revise or
get on a messenger w/ someone and revise, because usually
poems just need a little cleaning. Also revising with a female
she can help you on the female point of view. Some words dont
rhyme and some sentences are uneven. Try to keep them as
even with the syllables as possible. That way people can follow
much easier. All in all a good read. Keep Writing.

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