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short but sweet, some lines didnt really get me they seemed to be mis-used words...but it might have just b een me i'll give you an example..
I am loving you from in me mind
and loving you each moment more
that line was good but i thought the "me' should have been my, but iono lol...it sounds good i just thought it sounded better with my...but all in all great piece...and i was hopin you could critque my "Faight" poem...thanks amn peace
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