nice shit, kinda hard to do a war topic, i think Auspicious outshined yall in this collab, u all had kinda weak vocabulary, but u stayed on topic and was consistent, flow was good from all of u Chrit's kinda fucked me up a bit (sentences were broken apart) but other than that it was dope, here is the best lines from all of u
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Best Line From fgee:
ur like clones of hulk...green with envy and threads fallin apart at the seams
u've been bitch slapped so many times...face is constantly red
embarrased of your weak threats...these kids r like implants how they keep abreast
fuckin fags....say its only the net and u cry over losing battles
riding dicks so much...herbs set up bizness for custom made saddles
kids talkin gangsta 'l'm gonna wetcha'...yeh...with a super soaker?
get real...sorry i forgot ur all fake folk squinting to see skills but im out of focus
i'm sorry to poke fun at you....with a tongue of razors
to a so called pimp whos.... impregnated ur palms and given labour!
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u had a nice flow and some wordplay which is pretty decent, only flaw was some of ur wordplay was kinda old (Bin Laden line)
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Best Line From bribeone1:
Alone in a battle zone, while horns blow high pitch tone
I come through with forcefull blows thats bound to shatter bones
Scatter foes ......casue truthfully, im fucking sick of this shit.
im taking my last stand..dont care if im hit..this has to b it
Fuck bricks, im Tossing around a thousand pound boulders
may words make u wizer and help u out when your older
life itself is an inner brewing war with hidden soldiers who crave gore
eat off the innocent, and the lust 4 power just asks them for more
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ur flow was good, u stayed on topic very well props to that, only flaw u had was ur vocabulary was kinda simple
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Best Line From Chrit:
Best in the game... Whether it be audio topical or text...
Dominated all leagues... On top.. what could be next....
We would just retire... But then RB would die of boredom...
And if it ever went down... Regime would own the Legend Forum
So heeds Chrit's advice... Never oppose the best dude...
And if you do prepare for war... as we life-slip you...
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i can see u tried to stay on topic, lol, but ur only flaw was ur sentences were kinda broken up and u had some weak vocabulary, u probably wasn't in the mood of this shit when u done it, but other than that u stayed on topic pretty good and u had nice consistency and references to ur crew
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Best Line From Auspicious:
Sick N' Tired Of Bein Tired N' Sick, Bein A Bitch., How I Was Raised
Took Sick Days 2 Hide My Bitch Ways Un-Scathed In Tricked Face..
Me N' A Friend, Now N' Again, w/ A Pen, Would Jot Down Raps..
EveryOne Around Snaps..And I Would As 2 When It Hit The Trash..
Quick To Act.. Pissed, A Virgin Fist Slipped Back At His Hips..
Missed, Then Shot Wrists To His Lips..w/ The Teach In The Mix..
Enraged N' Over-Pissed.. Made Up My Mind.. Fuck It !..
I Was Rugged.. Time To Join The State Of Menace To Public..
Fuck Gurls.. Fuck School.. Fuck Faggots.. Fuck The World..
You Didn't Hear A Name w/ Fuck You After It Unless It Was Plurals
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ur verse stood out as the best to me simply because of ur vocabulary and flow, u didn't really stay on topic that much, but other than that i gotta say u outshined in this collab
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Best Line From 13th Disciple:
switch stance, yall some fake thugz like wearin blue shirts wit
red pants...
advert ur glance, cuz wit mitts on our fists we'll even catch ur
breath...
U see death.........1000 ways to die and yall got 999 ways left
plenty of time to rest...cuz wit the skillz combined we one of a kind
got beef?!...shit...we'll push yallz forehead all the way to the back
of ur mind...
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u had some pretty good vocabulary, good flow, stayed on topic nicely, some of ur shit made me laugh (fake thugz like wearin blue shirts wit red pants) and u had some nice wordplay
Overall here's who got what in this collab:
Vocab - Auspicious
Flow - bribeone1
Wordplay - fgee & 13th Disciple
Consistency - Auspicious & Chrit
Stayed On Topic - 13th Disciple
Multis - bribeone1 & fgee
Overall it was a nice piece to read, but i think u should all do another collab on a topic that u all agree on and feel that u can do ur best, that would be a nice read
Rating:
9/10