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Originally posted by rule
HOT...i really enjoyed that piece, the wordplay and metas reallu caught my eye, damn straight flow was great as well
Standing on the edge, I look into the depths of the shore
My cold breath soars, I stand and hold my head torn---
/\--that was a damn great opening...a lot of emotion
In a distort force, I feel the pressure of the breeze
I take a ruler to sleep just to measure my dreams---
that was also very dope, i could sence the hate and worry of thoughts...seemed really interesting
To measure the time to the line of confusion & reality
I move to illusion's activity's, trying to search for an answer
Motionless freelancer, toothless black panther
Atmosphere shattered by the sledge-hammer----
Also extreamily well writtin..."toothless Black panther" very unique i thought
Shining auras grow broader in my minds sun
Shadows grow darker in my dark lifes sun
My toes clench against the edge of chaos
As I watch the tide come in, and the rocks take off
Sea chaos, Im in the dry, staring at the aquarium
Now you cats chase my cheese
My mind's mice claws start tearing---
Very well worded, had a great feel of the title plus the emotion and thought
I hold emotions, and throw them in chao's ocean
No longer is my gun empty, or my sword broken
This water, im looking in the grinning face of death
But my spray can protects me as I embrace on his text
^^that was off the hook, you could really imagine tyhe gun empty and you looking ito the water...great lines
The Phantom Painter, Ghost writer, Shape Changer
Poltergiest calligraphy, Letter Drifter Sentence Raider---
damn...that was hot as fuck, the flow was quick but the creativity was amazing...great ending..all in all great piece...peep myn...Word Yet Unrevealed
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Wow I really liked your piece except for the last lines I think the last line were just to make it longer but this piece is my legend book.......... |