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Old 10-13-03, 05:37 PM   #3
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iight

i agree the message was the most important part in this piece, as is in most pieces, but you have to focus on structure still, try fixing it up once all the message and emotion is out. it was a good piece thou for what it was, thou sometimes a bit confussing when reading it. also i thought it could be a bit more expanded, or dug deeper in his life

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