DAMNNNN MAN....NO OFFENCE BUT YOU REALLY ARE A NEWBIE

FOR ONE...I AIN'T BATTLIN ANYONE SO THERE AIN'T NO PUNCHES IN THERE

next metaphors/similies

there at least 2 or 3 in there, and its only a 14 bar drop:

ignorance under the blanket, illness is still CONCEALED,
explanations you need, like MAGICIANS tricks REVEALED/
switch vocabularly stance, still reaching higher PLAIN,
rap and rhyme prose content, 5 mic award ATTAINED/
metaphor analysis, strugglin shows "can't handle THIS",
Master of ART spittin, LYRICAL creatin HIP HOP FISTS/

the vocab was good enough, not as complex as some of my others, but there defo wordplay....shit learn the definitions of the terminology, i can see you don't understand it...

dayum man....you need to go rhyme clinic, no offence, i mean the flow is "ok"....hahaha, newbie fo sho.....its aight....seriously tho, go peep the rhyme clinic