mainly you need to input a more consistent structure, that will not only make it look better and keep you within a kinda syallable line length limit, but it will help your flow

the vocab, wordplay and multis were all of a next level compared to this (above), so if you hit another verse with that same kind, but with a structure and better flow, you should elevate....

O and also, try not to force multis, you don't hav to always have them, try and only include those that are killers, and drop out the weaker ones....nice drop tho.....keep doin it