i agree love always does seem to have a way of kicking you in the ass, no matter how hard you try sometimes, but its just cause your one true love, soul mate, is still waiting to meet you, oh thats what i wish to think.

when i first read the big read letters the first thought that crossed my mind was this is going to be some rip off of an eminem i hate kim thing, but it wasnt. This piece was full of hard emotion, i could feel it, i could picture you like shaking almost when you were scratching this down, you really did good venting

but in the end i felt like it could have kept going, it just seemed to end so so fast you wake up and its over, it would be good for the middle, so try making the piece feel complet for ppl reading this that dont know what happened or whats going on.

also work on your structure and flow some, the way this was set up didnt make it an easy read to get a flow into, instead it makes it so im to busy trying to figure out when a sentence ends.

~Tera~
DONT HATE

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