did nt feel a good enough flow...even with the pauses...i think it woulda been better with more words, rather then lots of pauses,

structure was very tight....this meant that it did nt hav any creativity within the verse, but it was strict and if you did about 2 more words more i woulda felt a real good flow....

the vocab and wordplay was good, could be more complex and original....stayed on topic and told a kinda story but it some how did nt hit me as a tight drop..but showed good abilities...keep em comin