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Old 10-15-03, 02:04 PM   #5
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From: BELLSIDE...THATS ALL YOU NEED TO KNOW MOTHER FUCKER!!...~OrIgInAl~RaPbAtTlE~
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ok...

sentimentals...you had a lot of energy in most parts, but in others it died down...

to elevation:

this was is a simplistic piece, and that being the fact that this type of poetry structure is done over and over again....
to repetetive structure you have to come at it in a unique style and not the same based story line as many others.....

vocab and werdplay are fine...just work a little bit more on it though


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