B, I have read your work before, but this is such a contrast from your style of writting, as I know it. This piece is rather mature in message, although hastily worded. I mean for such a powerful message, the vocab seems to be lacking in certain areas. As if it was pieced together in a rush or sampled from other works. This could be intentional, which would tell me you are looking to shadow the verbage behind the content, or give it a dynamic that most poets do not incorperate in thier work. It's more an approach of an auther trying to compel and retain his audience in the early stages of his work, then ever so sutle, bring the literary pace up to his liking. Either way, I think the message here is not open to interpetation, but one that the author hopes is reflected in the response to his work. Why tell your audience your directin prior to them expressing their own understanding. It's much more satisfying for the poet to recieve feedback along the lines of his very own intentions with the piece. So this is why I think you want some solid feedback from those you consider insightful and or poeticaly aware. I am not now or ever will claim to be poetically inclined but I do appreciate a good piece for what it makes me feel during the read. I see this as a question to all, the auther seems to be pleading with his audiance, he wants to uderstand what he can not.

Why a nation untied is so largely divided. Why do those who live next door to atrocity do nothing. Why is it that unless ones self is treatend bothered or harmed, does one not concern him or her 'self'? Why is it that so many have made the ultamate sacrifice, for the good of all, yet all will not sacrifice for the good of few? Why is a nation held in such contemp and mis trust, when the very same nation has restored order and preserved humanity in the past. Why are we at war internally, conflicted as brothers and split on partisian resolve. I hear a young mind asking all these questions and begging for people to contemplate the same.

This what I got out of the piece, I have read many similar one's on the patriotic web sites, but usually they are more politically ai8med. This one seems to be aimed at the ideology of people and the civil unrest stiring in the background.
Can you sample the air and wind, taste the spoils of a split resolve. Is there cival war going on in the form of those narcisitic ideologies of preservation of oneself as opposed to the preservation of ones people. I belive there is, but do you? We can go on and on here, but note this, you have raised my eye brawl. I do not raise my eye brwl for just any simplistic idea, but if you are writting along these line, it's a relevant and profound concern. I have been argueing this for some time now, but I wil leave that alone for now. Great peice but I really think you know what it's message is, your just waiting for someone to touch on it.

Much respect. I will hit you up later, I have been very busy as of late. I have been contributing to many web sites and national debates, so as for now, my time on RB is very limited.

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