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Old 10-15-03, 10:37 PM   #8
DiverseSyndicate
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im not hatin but this piece was kinda off, you had alright wordplay average vocab, no rhyme scheme what so ever, tha story u portrayed was jus hatin, and you had no multis either, this flow could have used a prereading and some more work, no hate jus my opinion.keep elevatin.~1~
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