I really felt this piece.. as a person who gave advice to me I can see why i get good replys b'cos you knwo what your talking about when it comes to writing.. This was very grapic with some outstanding lines

year round cold has frozen the asthma of every plants' last breath.
no more grains of regret and even jesus broke his last bread.

That was a stunner.. Alot of other lines were really good but that was all in its own.. Just some great imagery there

Props