I like the creativity on this one but thats it though. The beat was Aiight, nothin to be like daaaaaaaaaamn y'know. The lyrics....They was tight, but they don't have no feelin in'em. Sounds like you got a bunch of words that sound the same and linked them together. You sound like Eminem. These arent bad things (depends how you look at it)don't get me wrong, your target audience seems pleased. I think it was well put together though

nice drop