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IP:
+ve 1 = nice structure
+ve 2 = nice flow
-ve 1 = weak topic
-ve 2 = not related to the topic
-ve 3 = too simple
Uv got the right idea here kid... u jus harmed urself by pickin a wack topic... an when u choose the topic make sure the verse is directed solely at that topic... try not to use fillers... picture the topic/person in ur mind like ur standin in front of them and then go all personal.
Other than that... not too bad for a first timer kiddo... keep elevatin.
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