hey yall.... im new to producing so give me some slack.. but i need some feedback.. tell me what i should add not add do or not do.... I NEED REAL CRITICISM TO ELEVATE... *Dont hesitate to show a lil love either

ok here is the FIRST BEAT I EVER MADE... like amonth ago... dont listen to long its trash... just want to give you an idea on where im comin from...

1 shot kill
http://www.soundclick.com/util/Stre...?ID=524848&q=lo
http://www.soundclick.com/util/Stre...?ID=524848&q=hi

now my new beat
elegant
http://www.soundclick.com/util/Stre...?ID=633865&q=lo
http://www.soundclick.com/util/Stre...?ID=633865&q=hi

this is a rough draft.. i left it open so i can take in suggestions and make changes.

i got some other ones... wat up.. am i elevate.. or what... do u see talent... ive been at it for about a month.

what suggestions you have??